Wow. You really worked this prompt (and worked it good!)
I loved how it progressed. Everything was so smooth and almost dream-like. Gentle. Yet somehow you managed to catch the rockiness of the grief as well.
I liked how Mikaela and Bee didn't really linger over Sam's death. I mean, they did but it wasn't what dominated their lives. They moved on. Didn't forget, just kept going. Many writers forget about the 'moving on' part of grief.
And the ending...I'm glad. Ending it on a dark, depressed note would have ruined this piece, I think. The way it did end...it fit. And kept the spirit and flow of the writing intact.
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Date: 2008-07-08 06:51 am (UTC)Wow. You really worked this prompt (and worked it good!)
I loved how it progressed. Everything was so smooth and almost dream-like. Gentle. Yet somehow you managed to catch the rockiness of the grief as well.
I liked how Mikaela and Bee didn't really linger over Sam's death. I mean, they did but it wasn't what dominated their lives. They moved on. Didn't forget, just kept going. Many writers forget about the 'moving on' part of grief.
And the ending...I'm glad. Ending it on a dark, depressed note would have ruined this piece, I think. The way it did end...it fit. And kept the spirit and flow of the writing intact.
It was really, very well done ^_^